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Slow this Bird Down vs. Sweet Pain (aka I was bored)

Posted: Sun Feb 01, 2009 10:25 pm
by Totopatter
yo y'all.. I was bored, so I decided to try singing one of my tracks on STBD, but I think it turned out ok. Hard to sometimes put into words what BOC music makes one feel, but I found these lyrics to be fitting. Let me know what you think.

The damage:

http://www.acidplanet.com/components/em ... 085&T=2051

Nothing final by all means, more of a rough version. Low quality..

Fun elements to look out for:

-added effects to my voice here and there but I'm not professionally equipped
-look out for a slowed down Rue De Whirl sample in there ;)
-sweet pain vocal is reversed at times
-etc etc...

Warning: DO NOT listen if you HATE vocals.

Let me know what you guys think.

Posted: Sun Feb 01, 2009 10:39 pm
by Aesthetics
You just beat Solange by miles!

Posted: Sun Feb 01, 2009 11:02 pm
by Archrival
thanks, nice effort...yes much, much better than Solange!

Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 11:58 am
by el-seadragon
Makes me wonder why crap like Solange is popular when you can make a better version so easily. :)

Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 3:08 pm
by Totopatter
thx guys, just having fun here..

I had no idea this was the track "Solange" had worked on .. My initial reaction when I heard it was "oh no..".. anyhow, not that i'm a genius or anything, and many variations are possible I guess... but I don't think the over-sung R&B/soulful approach blends in. Why "bury" a perfectly good track.. and her lyrics, hmm.. I would have opted for more subtle, enigmatic messages... Then again, those with commercial tastes and Solange fans love it.

Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 5:25 pm
by Cupz
Awesome! Very hypnotic. I wish the production was a little better.

Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 6:22 pm
by 88marquis
You most defiantly should perfect this, you've got a great voice!

Posted: Mon Feb 02, 2009 6:33 pm
by Totopatter
Thx for the encouragement, I'll definitely look into better equipping myself.. No much you can do when the sound is bad from the get-go.

Like they say: you can polish a turd.. but it's still a turd :p

UPDATE

Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 8:04 pm
by Totopatter
finally got around finishing the track, will send to Warp Records for rating/feedback/approval/non-approval

just one more thing needs to be done and then it's a go.

https://www.yousendit.com/transfer.php? ... TWwzZUE9PQ


You can download it now while supplies last (link expires in 7 days)

lemme know what you think :) Feedback welcome as per usual..

Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 8:38 pm
by CoBoC
Ehhh.
I'm sorry, I just don't like it. The vocals sound nice, but the lyrics don't go with the music at all, in my opinion.

Also I think I have an aversion to writing like this. Hearing stuff about "sweet pain" and "poison running through my veins" just immediately makes me think of goth and emo kids. Kinda pretentious.

Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 10:48 pm
by Totopatter
ROFL @ emo kids

you should see my hair today (uh oh)..

thx for the feedback though, and I totally see where you're coming from :)

Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 11:12 pm
by Joebot Kill
"better than solange" doesnt even do this justice.

i'm not sure what i was expecting, but it's perfect. if BoC ever had vocals in their songs, i'd want it to be JUST like this. sounds like youre a big fan of the cocteau twins and sigur ros! awesome job! not sure how i feel about that deep voice in the background though.

now this is gonna sound stupid, but i always thought you were a dude, totopatter. :lol:
i was surprised to hear this voice! very beautiful.

Posted: Fri May 29, 2009 11:58 pm
by jakestott
Joebot Kill wrote: now this is gonna sound stupid, but i always thought you were a dude, totopatter. :lol:
i was surprised to hear this voice! very beautiful.
Haha, me too!

But yeah, i really dig these vocals. Great work Toto!

Posted: Sat May 30, 2009 6:50 am
by 23degreesdream
I love the breathy reverby vocals swirling about there.. just right for my saturday morning hangover :) as someone else mentioned it's very Cocteu Twins. This is the approach Solange should've taken rather than just warbling randomly over the top of it, great work.

Posted: Tue Jun 02, 2009 7:03 pm
by Totopatter
thanx guys, I appreciate the feedback!

yes i'm a chica (last time i checked :o) but it's not uncommon for ppl to tell me that they think I'm a dude...

Messageboards are a maaaan's world mouaahahaha.. (and they've become my playground too.. somewhat)

Posted: Wed Jun 03, 2009 8:56 am
by Fredd-E
I approve.

The voice and lyrics, imo, fit this song a gazillion times more than the abomination by Solange.

Great work!